YAY!! You wrote my OTP!! I'm sorry I didn't get around to betaing this, but honestly I was only picking over little fiddly errors. All I wanted to do was gush over this fic and it is better to save gushing for your LJ comments.
First off I love the way you have structured this, using the inertia prompt. At first it is like Charlie and Desmond are trapped in their own isolated bubbles and then they become locked together in their private secluded ordeal. There is a twitchy scatterbrained quality to the writing in the Charlie sections which nicely constrasted the brooding and foreboding of the Desmond parts. Seriously, you expressed the two characters with the prose itself! It made this fic very evocative and tangible, so when you got to the slashy parts it really got under my skin!
Some details that I particularly loved... - Charlie's rampant curiousity and frustration that Desmond isn't much of a talker. - Charlie's period of Almighty Brooding Over Himself, so called by Hurley. - The Pace brothers being Python fans!! I can so picture them watching 'Life of Brian' together. - Desmond's agony in between flashes waiting for the next one to strike. - Desmond worrying that Charlie hates him and feeling so relieved that he doesn't. - The drug symbolism which is fitting since they are both substance abusers! - Desmond/Charlie quite literally making their own kind of music with their fantastic sex sessions. Rock on.
Thank you so much for writing this!! You've given me renewed love for my Lost OTP after I was tearing my hair out over them the other day. I think the trick is for me to forget S4 and live my Charlielives/Chesmond wins! happy fanonlands.
Oh, I'll try to get your Boone/Charlie/Alex fic finished soon, maybe next week!
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Date: 2008-05-13 07:04 pm (UTC)First off I love the way you have structured this, using the inertia prompt. At first it is like Charlie and Desmond are trapped in their own isolated bubbles and then they become locked together in their private secluded ordeal. There is a twitchy scatterbrained quality to the writing in the Charlie sections which nicely constrasted the brooding and foreboding of the Desmond parts. Seriously, you expressed the two characters with the prose itself! It made this fic very evocative and tangible, so when you got to the slashy parts it really got under my skin!
Some details that I particularly loved...
- Charlie's rampant curiousity and frustration that Desmond isn't much of a talker.
- Charlie's period of Almighty Brooding Over Himself, so called by Hurley.
- The Pace brothers being Python fans!! I can so picture them watching 'Life of Brian' together.
- Desmond's agony in between flashes waiting for the next one to strike.
- Desmond worrying that Charlie hates him and feeling so relieved that he doesn't.
- The drug symbolism which is fitting since they are both substance abusers!
- Desmond/Charlie quite literally making their own kind of music with their fantastic sex sessions. Rock on.
Thank you so much for writing this!! You've given me renewed love for my Lost OTP after I was tearing my hair out over them the other day. I think the trick is for me to forget S4 and live my Charlielives/Chesmond wins! happy fanonlands.
Oh, I'll try to get your Boone/Charlie/Alex fic finished soon, maybe next week!